Deviation Actions
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Description
So this is a work in progress of a comic I'm currently working on. owo I was going to stop here for the night, but I really wanted to see if any of you have any advice/critiques on it so far~
That's not the finalized dialogue, but I wanted to throw something rough in there to give you guys a little context. owo
I'm not that knowledgeable in comic making, so I wanting to get some inputs! ouo
I'll move this to my scraps later. xD
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Because my handwriting is so sloppy, here's what they're saying. xD
Angela: "Wow Andrew! This place is even bigger than I imagined!"
Andrew: "I'm so very glad you like it, Angela. It was a pleasure to take you."
Angela: "It's so beautiful too. I see why mom and dad liked it here..."
Andrew: "You're even more gorgeous! 
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Angela: "WAIT WHAT NO! NO I'M NOT! Shaddup!"
Andrew: "Oh! I haz an idea!"
Angela: *NO MORE*
Overall Vision
Originality Technique ImpactAlrighty ;3; so far this looks really good! I love all the different colors and effects with the background. They fit nicely with the expressions and emotions portrayed with the characters and just emphasizes that. Before you finalize it, there are a couple things that you can improve on~
As someone who reads and changes between an american left to right way of reading comics and the right to left Japanese version I am a bit confused on which way I'm supposed to read it. This can easily be fixed by numbering the panels or even just alerting the readers in the description (those who don't read the description can be confused because the description is there for a reason eue' let them figure it out XD) Also with the placement of the speech bubbles - a lot will be clarified with the clarification of which way this is read - but usually the one that is placed higher up in the panel is the one that's meant to be read first despite the side it's on. Andrew's panel by himself is really the only one I mean, the bubbled could be read interchangeably by the way they are place and the dialogue placed in them (which I realize isn't final)
Other than those kinks I truly love the expressions and the use of space, backgrounds and colors! I can't wait to see the final product! Keep up the spectacular quality~